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Chapter 7:
Extinction

     Helen's unborn child kicked harder as the contractions occurred more frequently. The last bit of sand in the hourglass was almost through. "Hurry Fabocusa," she screamed in her head as she grasped clumps of her raven black hair to try to distract herself from the ongoing pain. She rubbed her pale bulged belly, comforting her child. She hoped that her love would come before their child did. She didn't want him to miss it. A tear ran down her cheek as her amber eyes bore into the door willing it to open. Another contraction began and she gripped her belly. "Fabocusa, please," she whispered. Seventeen was too early for a girl such as her to give birth, especially alone.

     Med 25 examined a holographic image of the child checking its vital signs and body structure. The image changed to reveal her child's anatomy. As she listened to the heart beating on the monitor, she thought about the times she'd spent with him. It also gave her confidence that Fabocusa would arrive very soon.

    When the examination was finished, Med 25 extended a couple of its limbs out and transformed them into delivery hands to use them for the delivery. Suddenly an alarm blared violently all over the hospital and across the city. Everyone screamed and ran in every direction. Helen got scared, not knowing what was happening. She saw a built-in emergency page speaker on a wall which she could use to call her rescuer, but couldn't reach it.

     An angry, distorted demonic voice came from all over the city, even in the hospital's voice announcement. The deity himself manifested above the city and gave his speech.

     As soon as Seiton gave that speech, all Helen could hear were loud explosions coming from all over the city. The child was an inch away from being born and she couldn't run; all she could do was cry for Fabocusa's help.

     Then Seiton appeared while his energy and computer codes swirled around him as he pointed his finger towards her.

     "Helen, King Fabocusa's Human whore!" Seiton snarled. Helen crouched down in fear of his menacing glare-- his knowledge of Fabocusa and herself frightened her.

     "Get away from me!" Helen cried back pathetically as she wrapped her arms around her belly trying to hide it.

     "NO!" Seiton roared and another contraction struck the young girl.

     He continued, "A year ago on your planet, you served as a slave being tortured, beaten, and forced to work under the command of your masters. This damn Spacer, Fabocusa saved and impregnated you. You, the Humans, Mowls, Hyger, all of the primitives were mistakes that the Mechaniods made. You, the Spacers, and the primitives just live, die, feed, starve, rot, and burn into ashes. That is what this galaxy is filled with. Nothing, but useless infested critters!"

     Seiton's words overpowered her as her eyes were forced to lock into his. Helen thought she couldn't cry any more tears, her face hot and heavy, unable to see anything as fire burned through the deity's eyes.

     He continued, "And you have seen my vision of a perfected universe where all of the Spacers' Children gathered around and waited until my army slaughtered them letting everyone know that I am the true god of the universe!"

    "Stop it! Just stop! Don't do this to us!" Helen cried.

     "You will die before that foolish husband of yours reaches you!" he snarled looking down at her bulged belly, knowing that she was pregnant with a Human/Spacer hybrid. "As for your child, it shall be ripped out of your womb!"

    As the demon towered over the cowering Helen, he snapped his fingers and disappeared. Before he disappeared, he gained control over Med 25, directing the robot to cut open and wrench her child from the young girl’s body.

    Following Seiton’s orders, Med 25 approached the crouching Helen, and took out its laser saw and scalpels. The robot clutched her arms by force, dragging her to the operating table. She clawed desperately at its metal grip, screaming, and begging it to stop. Her scratches became fists as she was dragged like a wild animal. When it finally gotten her inside the operating room, it lifted her up and threw her on the table as if it were a professional wrestler. As she recovered from its brutality, she was then strapped to the table unable to escape and Med 25 hovered over her as a horrifying doctor.

     "No! No! No! Not my baby! No!" she kept screaming as it targeted her belly for the butchering.

     Just when its laser saw met the skin of her belly, Fabocusa grabbed Med 25 and threw it across the room. He shot it down with his weapon, ripped the metal straps off of Helen, and held her as tightly as he could.

     "Helen, we must leave now!" Fabocusa shouted as he lifted her into his arms as a firefighter carrying a child out of a burning house.

     "What are we going to do?!" Helen cried.

     "We've got to get to the throne room," Fabocusa said as he put a gas mask on her. "At the back of the room, there is a portal I created which will take you to Chartorla. We need to go there now!"

     When they got out of the hospital, the scenery changed drastically. Power plants blowing up, Spacer ships crashing down, every building was collapsing, and vehicles were crashing at random places. The roads opened up with erupting flames, which spread like wild fires and people were getting burned alive. Missiles and bombs were going off; few people were ripped apart by the medical probes and/or gassed to death. Their world was falling apart.

     Two more shuttles charged at them from opposite directions, but he made a shield that shattered those shuttles. As they made it through the gate, another wave of probes came up behind them. He touched a button on his rifle and threw it at the swarm. The rifle sets off a powerful static discharge, which wiped the wave out.

     As they got inside the palace, the heat and gas had eaten the dye off of Helen. Her vision was so blurry that she had to remove her lenses. Finally, her Human form was revealed. Inside the throne room, there was a ring-shaped portal right behind their throne. Fabocusa had her lean against a wall as he activated it. He typed the codes and a vortex was formed for them to go through. The palace began to crumble and there was little time for the portal to stay open.

     "My love, you have to go through the portal without me," Fabocusa said as he got his Human wife back on her feet.

     Helen was very shocked to hear that from her long time soul mate. She felt her heart crack.

     "I want you to be with our baby!" she cried. Then another contraction began, this time the pain felt worse causing her to scream and lose her balance. He grabbed her just before she fell to the floor.

     He warned her, "If I go with you, Seiton will gain control over the portal and we'll end up either in empty space, a black hole, or worse. I have to stay and keep that portal under my control until you reach Chartorla."

     "You will die!" she warned him.

     "Then I shall die!" he stated.

     "If you are going to die, I will die with you!" she shouted denying him to end his life for her.

     "No Helen, your life is more important than mine! I have to sacrifice myself to save you and our child!" he shouted. "You must hold on! Can you do that for me?"

     Helen looked down into the floor as she cried. He lifted her face up, wiped off her tears, placed his hand on her bulged belly, and begged, "Please, live for our child."

     Tears ran down both of their cheeks as their eyes were reunited. She nodded and he gave her a quick passionate kiss goodbye. After they kissed, Fabocusa said, "I love you."

     "I love you too," Helen cried as she kissed him goodbye. As soon as she went through the portal, Fabocusa kept holding onto the controls.

     "Come on! You can get there!" Fabocusa kept shouting out loud. Then the control system of the portal made beeping noises telling him that she made it. Fabocusa smiled and Spacer ship crashed through the roof of the palace.
This is the prologue of my story Hybrid. I hope you will enjoy all of my chapters. I will write the sequel to the series and there will be 5 books in this series. Enjoy!The preview image was drawn by 0-xcheekymonkeyx-0 Check her gallery if you want to. 0-xcheekymonkeyx-0.deviantart.…
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EclipseWielder Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm getting more and more interested as I keep reading! There are still errors like I have mentioned previously. One issue I want to point out is that once you introduce a character in their appreance, it shouldn't be cited and pasted into another section of the story. Say if a character was in the middle of a battle and their attire got torn/ripped. That would be a good example to describe the change. But other than that, I can't wait see what will happen concerning the mother and child. Good job!
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:iconbclement117:
That is a great idea! I will add that when I have the chance! :)
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EclipseWielder Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear! I meant copied not cited in my last comment. My iPad must of autocorrected on me, again. :XD:
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miffedplatypus Nov 2, 2012  Student Interface Designer
This is a good prologue. It sets up the right amount of tension and keeps the reader wanting to read more to see what happens.

Just a few things:

-I think every time you say snared you're actually meaning snarled since it is someone talking.
-A crack opened up in the middle of the road and he somersaulted over it just before the flames could touch them. He slid under a charging shuttle before it crashed into an exploding vent.
This seemed a little off physically since Fabocusa is carrying Helen. I think if you were carrying someone, you wouldn't be able to do somersaults and what not unless you're defying physics. o.O You might want to rework it to make it a bit more plausible.
-At one point you mention that Helen and Fabocusa are soul mates/long time lovers/etc. How long? Considering you mentioned that Helen is only 17 (and I'm assuming that Earth years), then really, she's too young to have been someone's lover for a long time.
-When Helen is saying good bye to Fabocusa and kisses him, you state that she's saying good bye to here her king, her healer, her friend, her god, and her lover. I really don't think all of that is needed, or if it is, then maybe it can be reworked. You have already established before this that they were lovers and married, so you don't need to repeat it here, especially since you have set up that she is crying and emotionally heart broken over leaving him.
-She felt her heart just cracked and started to cry.
I think you meant to say that she felt her heart crack and began to cry. It just sounds odd the way it is currently written.

I really like the set up and the premise of the story. I look forward to reading more. :)
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:iconbclement117:
Thanks for reading my prologue! :) I am glad that you enjoyed it. I have fixed it up as soon as I saw your message. Helen and Fabocusa had been soul mates for a year.
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miffedplatypus Nov 2, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Welcome! :)

Ah, okay.
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Thunderchild-Actual Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i agree with cahotic. excellent work. much improved over the original draft. a few more details here and there, please, but overall, very, very good work. thank you for sharing this.
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:iconbclement117:
Was my prologue appropriate to make it age restricted?
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Thunderchild-Actual Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yes, there are some adult themes in there, well done for thinking of the youngters.
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Cahotic Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Great work :D It's a really interesting story. A few grammar mistakes and a few scenes that could use some more detail, but all in all really good :) Some nice descriptive imagery :D
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