“with the Virgil star shining through” … so Virgil is the name of this planet's star, like Sol (our Sun) is for us? I can understand why you wouldn't want to write “with the sun shining through” since that might confuse readers, but naming the star shining through and calling it a star feels awkward. Maybe you could use a less definite word, like sunshine. And is Virgil a different color than Sol? So if it's green for example, you could say “with the green sunlight shining through” and readers would instantly know this isn't our sun

“could smell the [fragrance] of the wild flowers outside” or “could smell the [fragrant wild] flowers outside”

“What is [the] weather going to be today?” … or is he using incomplete sentences because he's sleepy?

“No clouds blocking the rays of the Virgil star” … and with Alpha helpfully naming the local star, you don't need to name it earlier

“Alexander [asked, amazed]” or “Alexander asked with [amazement]” or Show it, “Alexander asked, eyes wide”

“Not only [am I] a monitor, I [am] also a built in weather forecaster” … or Alpha speak?

“said Alpha flying up and down” … very good, now that's how you Show something is excited

“this weather monitor,” [and] Alpha took it off the bedroom wall and threw [it] out of the window” … and if you make it part of the previous paragraph, readers will know it's still Alpha speaking … also, the moment is funny and all, but was Alpha really going to litter?

“a quadlimbkey jumped onto the railing” … so it's a four-limbed creature that I'm guessing looks like a monkey? It's an alien, so why not give it six limbs and call it a hexlimbkey? Or eight limbs and call it an octolimbkey? My point is, a four-limbed creature like a monkey doesn't look any different from a monkey in my head, so why give it the alien name?

“Alpha yelled at Alexander” … Alpha has always sort of confused me with its wide range of emotions, being an AI and all, but that also Shows how advanced of an AI it is which is kind of cool. But feeling anger? Alpha has always been friendly and happy, so anger feels off for it

“He flipped to every page for a couple of minutes” … it takes Alpha several minutes to read a page?

“and disposed them into a trash can … why are you disposing plants into a can” … the repeated use of “dispose” and “can” feels weird, I think it's more interesting to find different ways of saying the same thing so close together. Maybe Alpha could say, “Why are you placing that organic leafy material in a metal receptacle”

“Alice [said, brushing] the dirt off … invade people’s lawns and kill [off] other plants”

“these weeds would be used as fuel for our power plant … It is amazing how humans like you have technologically advanced” … this is where Alpha mentions their technological advancement, after watching Alice rip up weeds? Now if she was using laser cutting shears or something I would understand, but I'm pretty sure they ripped weeds up two thousand years ago too

“All thanks to the Spacers who they [honored as] gods” … thanks to them? I thought the Spacers kept out of things, but it sounds like Alpha is giving the Spacers credit for inventing cities, animal husbandry, ship building and tool making

“Do you know anything about the Helbots” .. while I'm sure you're going somewhere with Helen asking about the Helbots, what happened to that conversation about humans worshiping Spacers? The idea that Spacers are the gods of ancient humanity is pretty amazing and could be an interesting conversation, but Alice just goes to another topic … Also, if the other alien races worshiped the Spacers too, does that mean they have suspiciously similar gods? So when humans and aliens first met, they were like, “What, you have tall athletic humanoid gods too? That's weird”

“I have a lot to [learn from] you and you have a lot to [learn about] us”

“As soon as he created me, [I was] programmed to gather and provide any information, record anything [happening] in the history of this galaxy, as well as [look] after your mother” … hm, this might be inconsistent with your new starting chapters, where Alpha was around well before Fabo met Helen

“Your mother was around [at] that time” or maybe “Your mother was [alive during] that time”

“Why [couldn't the Spacers] help her family”

“the Spacers should not interfere with the primitives activities” … uh huh, and that's why I'm confused by the part above where Alpha basically credits them with human technology

“used your mother and other young girls as slaves for men” … Alpha telling Alex his mother was a prostitute is a little odd; a normal AI would of course, facts are facts after all, but Alpha has shown emotions and perhaps empathy so I'm confused that it's not speaking carefully here

“Alpha let’s not be that graphic” … and Alice is the one who has to step in with a dose of empathy? Battle-hardened super soldier Alice? … Also Alpha wasn't being graphic, it was being explicit

“Your mother became a sex slave at age fifteen” … and that's even more explicit. Did Alpha not understand Alice telling it to stop? Though I do find it kind of amusing to have Alpha be so frank

“She later was sold as a slave to a queen who had three daughters. Both of them didn't make her life better” … “both” normally refers to two and I sort of understand you meant the queen and the daughters, but “None of them made her life better” would be more understandable

“and [they beat] her for mistakes” or “and [she was] beaten for mistakes”

“landed on a [mat] of mosses”

“Then the blue diamond glowed and a holographic image of Helen appeared” … hitting an object to make it do something is sort of a bad trope

“My family short lived when I was fifteen” … huh? Maybe “My family [died] when I was fifteen” or you meant to say “my happiness was short lived. When I was fifteen my family died”

“my sisters became sick … My mother got sick right after they died. Then my father and three brothers got sick” … why is the yellow fever so orderly in its killing? First the daughters (except Helen) then the mother then the men

“Being whipped [felt] like”

“were born to [be] men's property”

“offered food and wine to the wrong man” … did Helen give food and wine to the wrong man, or was she yelled at for giving food and wine to the wrong man, or did someone yell at her to give food and wine to the wrong man? Did Helen make a mistake, or the person yelling? This is sort of a confusing sentence

“Usha didn't care about my injuries; she just wanted to get the work done” … who is Usha? I thought she was the slaver and a ship captain, but now she's the owner of some kind of food and drink establishment?

“I had to [rub] them, wash them”

“touch their entire body with lubricants” … lubricants feels about as weird as that vibrator from the previous chapter, plus I feel that lubricant is a modern word and Helen wouldn't know it; “with oils” might be more fitting

“it was the most disgusting thing I have ever done” … care workers for hospital patients might have to do something like that, I know a nursing student who did. I can empathize with Helen finding it disgusting, but other people might feel like she shouldn't complain

“Nothing I could to satisfy myself or anyone, but being miserable and making Usha happy” … huh?

“with all hope abandon, never rest, and always pain” … hmm, Alpha just said the same thing in the same way, which feels odd to me … unless Alpha was saying it that way because that's how Helen said it? Does Alpha learn everything from those around it, including speech patterns?

“Then when I turned sixteen years old” … why did Usha wait until Helen was sixteen? Women were married off far younger during those times, so why does Usha wait until Helen is “legal” by our standards? Hm, maybe because that's how old Usha was?

“The man I was selected to was old, sick” … I can understand her first rape being with someone who disgusts her, but why make the guy old and sick? Frankly I feel like that guy wouldn't be interested, since being old and sick both tend to rob you of sexual drive

“but they [beat] me until”

“I had to live the rest of my life as an object, not a person” … hm, this idea of the woman as an object is more a modern feminist critique. I'm not sure someone of Helen's time would really think of it that way, no matter how accurate. Strange as it may seem, in her time this is how men might treat a woman of her social standing, so there's no reason for her to feel like less of a person

“hated myself as time [flowed] by me”

“There was still no one I could trust, there was no one who could help me” … with situations like this, most stories have the female slaves banding together for some hope and companionship. What's going on with the other slave girls? Why is Helen not talking to them?

“there was no one to please me” … Helen wants someone to please her? As in, um, sexually? As a sex slave, wouldn't that be the last thing on her mind?

“threw a black blanket over me” … does a black blanket mean something in particular? Why was it the worst night of her life? I agree with her if she was gang raped while wearing a black hood, but a blanket is not a hood and gives me the wrong image

“They were as cruel as Usha. They never did any work around the palace” … um, yeah, because they're royalty, of course they don't do any work. Why is Helen complaining about a queen and three princesses not doing menial work?

“I was to clean around the palace all day, wash their dishes, bath them, and offer them food and drinks. I had to dress them up just as soon they wake up for the day. I even had to fix their hair” … the sex slave stuff was pretty terrible, but this is just the life of a servant and pretty much the best her life has been for a while. This is stuff people do today without complaining, and she's living with royalty so she's better off than a lot of other people in her time

“I am a human being with a soul too” … did people of that time believe in souls? Sometimes I think Helen's thoughts are a little too modern for her time

“Why [didn't he save] her from this”

“of that idea, but he [had] a good point” … also, does Alice think of Alpha as a he? Personally I'm more in the “Alpha is an it” camp

Okay, now that was a mature chapter! But … do you need it with the new first chapters, which implied some of this without getting graphic? And I sort of remember this stuff being mentioned elsewhere too, and even within this chapter it is said once by Alpha and then again by Helen herself. The readers don't need to be told something four times. For the story as a whole, do we need to know that Helen was a sex slave? Does Alex need to know it? In other words, does this chapter need to exist? Maybe it was important for when you first wrote this story to get the character of Helen solid, more for you as the writer than anyone else, but I think it could be cut from the final product

Any questions for me?